Review of: Four Horsemen (revised)
reviewed by jgravitch on 08/05/2004
From the start this script struck me for its spry and lively style. The characterizations were well drawn and I liked the story development leading up to the war. There were some nice moments during the transition - the contrast of Julio's lightness to the building weight and horror around him, and the moment in the trenches when Julio remembers the tango music in Paris - to name a few. I found the Julio worship a little surgary for my taste - while it was apparent his character changed, the tilt of the admiration ruined the evolution a bit for me and contributed to my biggest criticism - it seemed like war was still glamourized, and bravado and heroism were upheld as an ideal when WW I supposedly smashed that perception to bits. I think it's okay to portray Julio as somebody admired and respected for his courage, and to perpetuate the notion that everywhere he goes he's still the center of attention, but once it takes on the tone of drum beating it loses me. It detracts from the title card at the end, which emphasises the horrible cost and unparalleled inhumanity of the war.
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