Good Ideas But Poor Development
I like the idea of the story although it feels like the script puts a more negative spin on the lead's sexual preference than the other character's do. This fact should have more relevance or at least a more immediate consequence.I also felt the dialogue was not written for the time period the story is set within. The dialogue seemed much to modern. Of course, it should be in German and I understand some liberties need to be taken but the characters and dialogue do not feel historical enough.My biggest complaint would be from pacing. No scene is given enough time to really develop and as a result I did not feel a connection with any characters. This speed works sometimes but fails in most cases when dealing with an historical drama such as this.
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