Your piece was really well written, enough to make me commit the sin of reading for pleasure, not to review. :) That's one of the best compliments I can give. It's engaging, intriguing, keeps you wondering throughout the story, and the last line is deliciously satisfying.
Your characters journey through philosophy was pretty much just right. Not overdone, but not so much detail all you get's a yawn.
I would like his life to be examined more closely. Instead of saying he cheated, recount an incident. Give us a good anecdote about Caroline, some way your main character wronged her, known or unknown to her.
Again, really nice work. The writing is clean and descriptive without ever getting in the way of itself. Good work.
Review of: The Epiphany
reviewed by krtshadow on 11/14/2008
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