The short was paced quite well. The dialogue was very well put together, and the camera work was okay too.
I think overall it was a shame that there wasn't a little more thought put into the plot though, especially as the beginning with the two guys chatting was a very strong start. I was impressed straight away with the dialogue and acting, these guys seemed so natural, it was just a bit of let down then, with the ending.
Well, thanks for uploading, keep up the good work, but work more on the overall plot, cya!
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A review of The Doll (2nd Draft)by timhan on 11/14/2008This short story wasn't half bad. I think it has a lot of potential, but I did feel it was a bit too short. I also think for a horror story it could have done with a bit more gore perhaps, what about hearing the screams of the mother, etc.? I also felt that the daughter going back to bed wasn't really very realistic. I think I would have preferred the daughter to tell her... read
A review of 3by timhan on 03/19/2008The shots on the sofa were way too static and the acting needed work. Also, the music didn't fit the piece too well. Finally the script on the whole was way too predictable and I think you should of got someone else to read it and give you feedback. Hmm, that doesn't too positive so sorry for the negative comments.
A review of Distanceby timhan on 03/19/2008this really did drag on. It was far too much of a talky, and although it looked nice enough it just didn't seem to fulfill it potential. The ending was a total let down, and really the short didn't go anywhere, which is a shame as it did have potential, but the script really did need a lot more work. Anyway, thanks for uploading.