great job - haunting
Great job. I read it in one sitting and have been thinking about it ever since. Great lead character. Secondary characters excellent as well. Haunting. Loved the reversal in some of the characters, especially the hispanic kid. Great details. Sense of place. Atmosphere. I only wish you had given the romance a second chance - even if it doesn't work out in the end. Also, the ending was slightly anti-climactic for me. But that is all. I don't agree with some of the other reviewers who say they don't see this as a film. I do. Good luck with it.
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