The story has the feel of a blog and as such gives the impression that it's a quick note to self,about nothing much in particular - in this case an annoying song on the radio.
I read it three times, put the story down and went for a coffee. It was then I realised what the author was getting at here - the hatred of something, the prejudice against a benign topic, saying more about the listener than the tune. It's a refreshing way to put the topic across but if it were my story I would have injected some friction along the way. Some consequence of the hatred rather than just changing the tune, but that may just be me.
'A new pair of glasses for my ears', indeed, nice one Andy.
Review of: To Change the Channel
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