Really nice work. Your set up in Act One of the main protagonist is spot-on of Morris and his political leanings. He espouses them daily over his morning radio show. I never felt he was a caricature. Itís difficult enough to do a political satire or farce right without someone feeling slightedóbut I feel you pulled it off. Your dialogue and action/exposition is pithy and well-done. Iím sure you can appreciate the word pithy with all the references to Bill OíReilly and Sean Hannity.
There are some good laughs in Act One and it gets even better in Act Two. I loved the way Bigfoot and Sydney fucked with Morrisís head after the car accident. He lost the memory of who he was. Now heís Moeóa die hard liberalÖ Lol. I donít often say this, but youíre a really good screenwriter and comedy is so God damn hard.
Cynthia had the right balance as an antagonist that made Morris shine. Sheís his fiancee who comes in at the beginning and end of the story at the right moment.
The ending wasnít totally unexpected but satisfying. Overall, a top-notch screenplay. I donít know how much help I can offer, other than to say youíre talented and keep writing!
INT./EXT. WEST VIRGINIA RURAL ROAD Ė DAY
Morrisí car glides along a two lane road through sun drenched hills and shady sylvan glades.
Thereís no so such thing as an exterior/interior shot of a road, although I know what you meant by the action that follows.
You might want to useÖ
INTERCUT BETWEEN DONNA AND KEITH
While they carry on a conversation over the phone.
When itís over.
You threw me for a loop with the heavy underling; it took me out of the moment.
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