Review of: THE 16th MINUTE
reviewed by Condrashoff on 11/20/2003
HOCKEY TO HANG YOUR HEART ON
OKAY, just to be completely honest, I HATE hockey. I don't relate to the game or the culture surrounding it, but....that didn't take away from my enjoyment of this screenplay. It is great to read a well writen screenplay. The structure was good, and the characters are multidimensional and believeable. The story, although not exactly original, was still compeling. One thing that needs some work is the wordy dialogue. Especially surrounding the AA meetings. Eddie has way too much to say that doesn't help the story. Plus, how does Mac just happen to find everyone when he returns. Small details. The overall effect was a good story. The title was good.The ending was appropriate but unexplained. Also I thought that Gina was pregnant with Tommies child. The pregnancy test kit? Or was that from Mac's time. A little confusing. The hockey is good background action to keep the adrenalin going in the audience. Myself, I like to use war as the backdrop to romance. Either way, it works well. Good luck.
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