Review of: Here's To Revenge 

reviewed by silverberetta17 on 03/11/2008
Credited Review
silverberetta17
I Loved It! I Loved it! Credited Review
No, seriously I did. I usually put a quirky headline whenever I review a script, but this screenplay deserves my initial thoughts.
This is a great read. So much of the dialogue and the characters ring fresh and hilarious. Rick and Victor's lines are very funny, as are the rest of the incidents.
Once I started reading this, I couldn't stop. I'm serious- it's true.
I liked the unfolding mystery very much, with all these twists and turns that you're constantly addicted to the script.
This is obviously a Dark Comedy/Thriller, because of all the good lines and then all the blood you throw on us. Loved the final twist, too!
So was Victor the only one who he said he was? I had to go back and check to make sure Yuki's plan worked accordingly.
I'm also confused by the beginning. Who was the Portly Man? Did I miss something? What did he provide to the story?
Some of your formatting is wrong. You need to put either "DAY" or "NIGHT" after
"INT. KITCHEN-______".
Spellcheck this again, too. Many "your" when it should be "you're".
But I'd really love to watch this on the big screen. You have a neat structure and juggle thrills with laughs- that's pretty professional in my opinion.

And one last thing, shouldn't Yuki let the Female Assassin live and have what she actually did haunt her for the rest of her life, instead of her realizing it and just dying? So much for his revenge if it's all over with a bullet!

Best of luck!

Nick O.

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