reviewed by Beholder on 02/23/2004
Credited Review
I wanted more Credited Review
A truly good beginning, but I really wanted more depth, more background, more emotion from ALL the characters. I don't know enough of the back story to understand Carl; I'd like to know more about the accident -- what was it they didn't tell Josh? -- Susan's involvement with the family, more of Naveed's back story... This could be a tour de force for a gifted cast, but they need more to work with. Also, the device of the journey begins to get tedious; driving just doesn't provide a lot of good visuals, even with scenery. Keep working at this; there's a fine movie in here.

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