Review of: Devolution
reviewed by Cheyenne30 on 02/02/2012
This story was well written. The idea of a banned player, playing for another team is interesting. I donít know much about soccer but feel that he would have been suspended longer because of this. I would like to see the information as to why he was suspended to begin with. Was he too rough or just not playing within the rules? Is the owner of the Welsh FA team the only one that catches on to who he really is? I think you did a marvelous job in writing this very short story. You start it out at the beginning of the training and debate within him-self. Good job!
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