The writing here offers some flowing prose and phraseology, plus some words rednecks like me have to look up: Morpheus: Didn't he play third base for the Yankees? And demeure? Is that a fat girl who doesn't sweat much?
Charlie's prediciment is familiar. He wakes up in bed with one he doesn't recognize who Morpheus recalls to sleep mode, then remembers another who was very impressive. The chance relocating of Isabel's number is believeable and makes the reader want him to find this mysterious babe.
The end is good. Charlie seeks and finds his lost lady and they appear on the way to live happily, etc. I might have considered an ending wherein when she answers the door she looks like King Kong. Or hell, maybe a ghost. That would teach Charlie not to drink and stay out late.
A quick, easy read, with good descriptions, and a soft landing at the end.
Review of: Ghost Chasing
reviewed by gclifton on 03/19/2010
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