With the limitations imposed upon the filmmaker, the aesthetics and production design are really immaterial here.
So what we're really evaluating is the story.
Overall, the story is what it is. It's not terribly creative nor is it terribly bad. It's just two people who share a connection from across a busy street. That's all fine and good, but why do they then pass each other if they are attracted to one another? Is it simply to create the excuse for the unwitting dude to be hit by the unaware driver? If so, the needs of the story could have been better served. In the end the woman abandons the poor shmuck who couldn't make it across the road again (or wait for the light to change again). I guess I really just want the story to have a purpose, which is really what is lacking here. At the end of the short "film" all I'm left with is to wonder what I'm supposed to take from that...
I suppose there was probably some sort of restrictions on time to come up with the story for this competition as well, which would explain a lot. But at the end of the day, people will only remember how good you are based upon the last film of yours that they've seen...
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A review of Viva Los Donaldby FloydTheSecond on 08/17/2006I must start off by questioning that choice of genre. I saw nothing at all Science-Fiction, nor was there anything Fantasy, save the dream sequences which doesn't even qualify... Perhaps the problem in catagorising this short is due to its lack of story. True it does have a beginning, middle, and end, but what was the point? Am I to think that all G.A. groups are just fronts... read
A review of The Solo'sby FloydTheSecond on 08/15/2006I found this short to be okay. It's not bad, in many ways it was technically quite proficient, it just was rather bland story-wise. It was creative in it's concept to juxtapose the Star Wars characters against The Ozbornes reality show, but the comedy just wasn't there. Especially when dealing with something as big as Star Wars that's been parodied many times over, you've... read