Goose is well written, your imagery is clean and unconfusing. It's easy to for the reader to get into the character's shoes. It also evokes the feeling of living on the fringe, a place where people fell through the cracks, or dove through of their own will. Well done.
What it doesn't do is tell a story. There's sort of a story with Matt and Roger, but there's really no detail. Our protagonist never does anything to drive the story forward, he just reports the events that happen around him to us. At the end, I'm still unsure as to what the purpose of the story was.
Review of: Goose Hollow Christmas
reviewed by krtshadow on 11/16/2008
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