Review of: Immortality 

reviewed by mwiings on 09/23/2010
Credited Review
mwiings
Lifetimes Credited Review
This is quite an interesting read. I like your attempt to create a new twist of how we define time and natural lifetimes versus ‘lifetime’.

The only major issue with the story is the lack of development of Skye’s character and I wish there was more actual interaction between Ewan and Skye so that the reader experiences Skye instead of just experiences Ewan experiencing Skye. While the story is of Ewan and his longing to continue a life that is no longer his, giving more of Skye’s character would make their union more ‘wholesome’ (for lack of a better word) and give us more of Ewan. The exchanges between Ewan and Gwyn however are very good and very well done.

All in all a good story but perhaps try and make the interaction between Ewan and Skye more tortured, or were you avoiding that in the first place?

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