Review of: The Ark
reviewed by judylewis on 06/27/2004
Lost Kids in Space
A fast read with good visuals and characters we care about. The story suffers sometimes from preachy dialog that spells out many of script's themes. The scenes with Gentor in particular, are too on-the-nose. "The trust we have for each other is all we have that stands between us and the darkness outside." Sometimes the action is sufficient (the anarchist scenes are terrific), and the dialog could just be cut. Othertimes, substitute more action for exposition. The talk about isolation should be replaced by scenes (or flashbacks) of the isolation and death. Who the main character is is unclear. Magda? Daz? Gentor? There only one girl? Are girls less likely to survive? Sexual competition (or drugs) might explain their extreme behavior. The scow scenes needs a ticking clock. You need to reiterate the point of the scow trip. Subplots go nowhere & don't move the story forward. Richard's affair is noted but not shown. The rich don't change. The chicken coop mayhem and Magda's ultimate solution are good. The space walk is dramatic. Focus on your main characters and subordinate your subplots (Magda & Daz, Fair & Richard). Interweave the subplots with the main plot or cut them. But Magda's dilemma is unresolved. Don't leave us hanging.
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