This reads well because it is pretty erotic with plainitive descriptions of body parts, the sex act, foreplay, and a reaonable conclusion. You described a frequent scenario: Attraction erodes, an old scene becomes mundane, couples, once with a shared gift, drift apart. Then the second great realization: A loss sometives becomes visible too late to do much about it.
You have a good way with words and write in a clear, concise voice. The capture of the boredom of the waning couple, the long silences, arerwell done. A good read.
Review of: The Yacht
reviewed by gclifton on 03/10/2010
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