Other Reviews by gclifton 311

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  DIAL 911
  A review of The Walking Man
  by gclifton on 04/26/2011
  You've taken an unlikely fantasy scenario and honed it into a readable, interesting tale. Your descriptions, fears, and thoughts are vivid. In taking on a project like this and having to stretch a limited experience into six pages, the various pieces sometimes run a trifle long, but then the experiences ARE the story. Have you considered giving the speaker a little back... You've taken an unlikely fantasy scenario and honed it into a readable, interesting tale.
  Your descriptions, fears, and thoughts are vivid.
  
  In taking on a project like this and having to stretch a limited experience into six pages, the various pieces sometimes run a trifle long, but then the experiences ARE the story.
  
  Have you considered giving the speaker a little back story or have him show doubts: "I didn't think this sort of thing possible?" Or perhaps at the end have the speaker go home to a mental institution where an attendant asks him how his day went? Maybe down a hallway, he sees the Walking Man. Or the attendant is wearing the Walking Man's coat?
  
  None of that is criticism. Just sayin'. On balance, a good read. read
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  LOST IN PLACE
  A review of Glimpse
  by gclifton on 04/25/2011
  Well, I've read it twice. The writer is very accomplished in word usage, catchy phrases, and metaphors. I guess I'll be embarrased to read I mis- interpeted this piece, but as I see it, Carter's problems stem from playing with sparking toys following lasik surgery. He is either hallucinating or has been cross circuited into some very heavy stuff and may well now have X-Ray... Well, I've read it twice. The writer is very accomplished in word usage, catchy phrases, and metaphors.
  
  I guess I'll be embarrased to read I mis- interpeted this piece, but as I see it, Carter's problems stem from playing with sparking toys following lasik surgery. He is either hallucinating or has been cross circuited into some very heavy stuff and may well now have X-Ray vision. If I see that right, this is a very innovative, well constructed yarn which reads easily from start to finish.
  
  If not, then drat, I've failed again.
  
  I'm not certain as to the value of the seal stamped in the lower right corner of each page which inhibits reading.
  
  Found this a good read, assuming I had enough sense to follow it correctly. read
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  THERE GOES THE NEIGHBORHOOD
  A review of HOURS END
  by gclifton on 04/25/2011
  Happyville is going to hell -- overrun by those hungry neighbors. Or maybe they're just greedy former taxpayers who've gone bust because politicianS spent all the money. And that slimeball Thomas. Offer the protag a pizza, then invade lkie Attila the Hungry and tear up the place. This is an interesting read, if for no other reason, the uncertainty of what the holy neb is going... Happyville is going to hell -- overrun by those hungry neighbors. Or maybe they're just greedy former taxpayers who've gone bust because politicianS spent all the money. And that slimeball Thomas. Offer the protag a pizza, then invade lkie Attila the Hungry and tear up the place.
  
  This is an interesting read, if for no other reason, the uncertainty of what the holy neb is going to happen next.
  
  I bet you could squeeze in a slicker read if you'd open with a hint of back story. "They seized the City Hall that day..." or somc such.
  
  A good read which with a little polish, could be even better. read