Review of: Unconditional 

reviewed by bigheadx on 03/12/2012
Credited Review
bigheadx
Love my dog, love me? Credited Review
This is a cute, extremely brief story with a twist that is a slight surprise. As a writing exercise, this reader admires your effort. But at the basic story level, what is so unusual about an older, unattractive man having a young, much admired dog? The repetition of reactions from strangers seem merely in place so as to "pay off" and exaggerate the twist. Even an adolescent reader might feel manipulated.
That said, in this reader's opinion, the writing is clean, colorful, and devoid of mistakes (but, why so many semi-colons? many are inappropriate and/or unnecessary).
Nice job!

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