The horror of it all, a first date. We all have the jitters and want it to go just right. With proper and careful preperation it will.
the story is richly written with just the hint of simpleness. It goes streight to the heart of the story. The style of writing fits like a glove.
Spelling is carefully checked, English grammar is properly used and the punctuation is well done. A careful job of storywriting, as it should be.
The story has a transparent storyline and we see the end comming. The twist of how the crime was discovered disguises the transparency and heals it. The story has a clear theme that is never lost sight of and the point is driven home clearly and forcefully. Well done.
Review of: Bathtime
reviewed by chessaol on 11/25/2008
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