No happy ending...hmmm
It's weird, I get sick of the sappy endings. Movies always having to have a happy endings. The kind that Hollywood vomits out every year, but when there's a movie that challenges this practice I always question it. Much like the movie The Mist, you're script turns my head in question and makes me wonder if I like the alternative. And I'm still lost in whether or not I accept it. As for the story, yeah, it's not bad. Kind of reminded me of 1983 version of The Thing(not a bad comparision as I loved that movie) except set in a mountain town. The only thing this script didn't have was the fighting amongst each other on who was infected and who wasn't. I had a couple problems. One, the flames lick a Bible open? And the password was right there? I just couldn't buy it. And who would write the password in a book like that? I don't know, maybe some people would. And flames licking a Bible open? Bibles are usually heavy binded books. And two: Guy says that Ron provided the diversion they needed to get away? But Ron was dead. And then Alice says, "it must of been the propane tanks." It confused me a little, but then again, maybe I'm easily confused. Overall, you got a pretty good gore movie here. I can see a lot of gore and sickness going on. While I wasn't really thrilled how the ending just kind of meandered to the house where they ended up, it didn't seem like there was a gigantic build up to an unescapable end and they get away from the town. They just simply left. Except for maybe the copter shooting at them. And a couple soldiers. Oh well, then that would be a typical Hollywood build up and escape at the last second kind of thing. Your script defies some traditions in good ways and some I'm not sure about. While I wouldn't run to a theatre to see it, I would definitely rent it and check it out. You know how to write and structure a story(loved how you inter mixed some of the scenes) and make it interesting. Good luck with this. I was one of the better scripts I've read on here. I didn't find myself bored and wishing it would just end. Good luck.
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I have to say first off, i really liked the Lou character. He had a different way of talking to others. And I liked how he stood out. As far as the other characters, not bad. I kind of liked how Monte in the past was potryaed at the beginning like was some super cop that Arnold or Sylvester would play, but now he's a shell of him former self. The Lil' Darlin character fell...
I have to say first off, i really liked the Lou character. He had a different way of talking to others. And I liked how he stood out. As far as the other characters, not bad. I kind of liked how Monte in the past was potryaed at the beginning like was some super cop that Arnold or Sylvester would play, but now he's a shell of him former self. The Lil' Darlin character fell a little flat for me and wondered why it took her so ong to do this when she must of known Monte for awhile. She knew the meat character for awhile it seemed. I don't know, maybe I'm forgetting something cause i did read this over a course of a week (as my computer went down and had to get it fixed). But anyway, story was good. I liked the poisoned character must raced to get revenge on his would be killer plot and the Devil assisting aspect. And the Devil kept me going. The only thing that caught me off guard, was the fact that the script kin dof went a long like it was a semi-serious piece with a few quips of humor an dthen all of the sudden it turned into a WWE full fledge battle royal with an imitation of the Hulkster. It just caught me off guard. Thought if it was sillier to that point it would make sence. But that's just me. Over all, not a bad script. Something about it didn't excite me or make me think, damn, that was good, but it wasn't bad either. I'd checke dit out if it was a movie.
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First, when I was reading, I got a little lost in the British slang, but forged on and accepted it. The story overall was an interesting idea, and may play out better in a movie format, with the speed of something like Everything Must Go, not real energetic, but interesting enough to watch. But reading it was kind of a chore. The Patrick character didn't seem to have a lot...
First, when I was reading, I got a little lost in the British slang, but forged on and accepted it. The story overall was an interesting idea, and may play out better in a movie format, with the speed of something like Everything Must Go, not real energetic, but interesting enough to watch. But reading it was kind of a chore. The Patrick character didn't seem to have a lot of depth. Just a shallow person who's pissed off a lot of people and had no friends. The Marcia character caught me off guard once where she started cussing like a sailor and gave an excuse that she does that once in a while when playing certain roles, but never does it again. I liked how you pulled it together at the end with Aimee, Marcia, Terry and the like, but then again I was caught way off with the Aimee thing. Other than her calling Terry a thousand times, I wasn't expecting her to do this, let alone call Patrick to tell him that she did something wrong. It just seemed unplausable. And I figured if Patrick was going to grow as a person, he would gotten out of the business and into something bigger. But I guess, it works in some ways. Overall, it's not badly written, despite a few problems. Maybe, cause I'm not British I didn't catch the style and atmosphere of the movie. Other than that, I'm not sure what to say. Interesting, but it just seemed to stroll along at a slow pace and I lost my interests. Maybe somebody else may find something really good about this, cause it's not horrible, just needs the plot to picked up a bit.
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First off, I understand that there is a lot of effort to set the mood. But I don't know if the author has heard different, but I've always heard, don't write what can't be filmed. And there were a few times I was a little concernd about the description, such as: Get your mind out of the gutter. (when Charlette & Lily are laying together.) And the line: Yes VHS. Unless the character's...
First off, I understand that there is a lot of effort to set the mood. But I don't know if the author has heard different, but I've always heard, don't write what can't be filmed. And there were a few times I was a little concernd about the description, such as: Get your mind out of the gutter. (when Charlette & Lily are laying together.) And the line: Yes VHS. Unless the character's thinking it, not realy needed. I don't think this was needed. And another thing that drove me crazty is the excessive use of --- & ... Especially at the beginning of a description of action. I think I know why they are there, but they are way over used. There was also a lot of missing question marks. A lot. Story wise, it was an ok script. I was bothered at one point that Charolette was talking about all the crazy things that were happening to her in her sleep, but at the point, only Mr. Krager had killed himself. So, I was a little lost. Character wise: there were some good characters. I liked the Lily character the most. She seemed to have the most energy. Structure wise, the script was good. It had it's beginning, set up, plot developement and ending. For the most part, I was just noticing small errors here and there. While I wasn't blown away by the story, I can see it being like a teen horror. Just a few scares, no real horror, but not god awful either. Good luck with it.
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