Other Reviews by inanezebo 37

• 
  A wise man once said...
  A review of A Wise Man Once Said
  by inanezebo on 02/08/2006
  ...a comedy is much better if it has some laughs. While not a disastrously bad production, "A Wise Man Once Said" is weighed down by it's lack of action, setting changes and good solid guffaws. Pros: * The lead actress is pretty, dynamic and fills her role well. * Well lit - particularly for using candles and house lights. Good job. * Good sound. Cons: * The inexperience of... ...a comedy is much better if it has some laughs. While not a disastrously bad production, "A Wise Man Once Said" is weighed down by it's lack of action, setting changes and good solid guffaws.
  Pros:
  * The lead actress is pretty, dynamic and fills her role well.
  * Well lit - particularly for using candles and house lights. Good job.
  * Good sound.
  Cons:
  * The inexperience of most of the actors is sorely evident.
  * The dialogue is flat and uninteresting.
  * The lack of setting changes coupled with the lack of action really makes the flick drag. Without any good laughs along the way to the punchline, it's difficult for the viewer to stay engaged.
  *The punchline is too obvious - no surprise.
  That said, congratulations on completing a short and having the guts to upload it to TS. Best of luck on your future endeavors. read
• 
  A real joy to watch
  A review of Bachelor 37
  by inanezebo on 02/08/2006
  This is absolutely fantastic - a smart, funny movie with action, great pacing, beautiful shot selection, good dialogue... Geez, I'm gushing like the MacKenzie brothers' bladders after a vat full of Molson. Seriously, this was a fantastic flick. The HD looks great - well lit and great shot selection (I love the wide shot of Paul walking past the building mural). The lighting... This is absolutely fantastic - a smart, funny movie with action, great pacing, beautiful shot selection, good dialogue... Geez, I'm gushing like the MacKenzie brothers' bladders after a vat full of Molson.
  Seriously, this was a fantastic flick. The HD looks great - well lit and great shot selection (I love the wide shot of Paul walking past the building mural). The lighting was great. The acting and dialogue were good. The premise was funny, the material was treated well, and you capped it off with a can't miss ending that gave the viewer a character change in Paul. Even the sound was great. Criticism? The only thing I can come up with is that the short maybe slowed down just a bit much during some of the dialogue between Paul and his long lost girlfriend.
  Kudos, to all who worked on this, for a job well done. read
• 
  Dry, dry, dry
  A review of Poetic Injustice
  by inanezebo on 02/07/2006
  "Poetic Injustice" has a good premise - the idea of young poet who struggles for weeks to create the perfect piece only to find the success he craves in a flash with an off-the-cuff poem written in a burst of anger. However, the execution of the movie leaves the idea flat and largely fails to engage the viewer. Pros: * A good, funny idea of how we sometimes find success in... "Poetic Injustice" has a good premise - the idea of young poet who struggles for weeks to create the perfect piece only to find the success he craves in a flash with an off-the-cuff poem written in a burst of anger. However, the execution of the movie leaves the idea flat and largely fails to engage the viewer.
  
  Pros:
  * A good, funny idea of how we sometimes find success in the most surprising ways. The idea, however, would have worked better in either a shorter version - a quicker setup and punchline - or as a larger piece with more character development.
  
  Cons:
  * A lot of technical issues hamper this short. The lack of lighting on the interior shots really detracts from the piece. The sound is low on volume for the few spoken lines. Adding environmental sound - even just birds chirping and automobile noises on the exterior shots; muffled auto noise, maybe a siren, coffee pot brewing, apartment neighbors walking by etc. for the interior - would have greatly enhanced the ambiance. The addition of music would also have helped juice up what comes across as a very dry view.
  * The production notes list the original version at 16 minutes. At 6 minutes 44 seconds, the piece is still too long given the material presented. We only learn two facts about the young man - he considers himself a poet and he apparently works at Borders. I think this would have worked fine as a quick gag - show the young poet agonizing, the rejection, the enraged response and the happy ending in lean 3-4 minute running time. Or go for the longer version, but add some character development - Why is this particular contest so important? What drives the young man to write poetry - fame, money, the desire to create great art, a compulsion he can't control? Give the viewer reasons to care about the poet and keep them engaged. The lack of action and dialogue in the piece really makes it difficult to keep interested in his struggle as it's presented here.
  * This is nitpicky, but I try to be thorough. Logistically, it's weird that the poet submits his first entry by snail mail and recieves the rejection the same way, but then immediately submits a second entry via the Internet followed by an email congratulatory note.
  
  Best of luck to you on your future endeavors. read