The good news is, the story is only two pages long. The bad news: It’s two pages long.
I really don’t know what to say, except perhaps that the writer clearly has passion for writing – a solid foundation to build on.
It would be a good idea to start with a simple question of ‘WHAT IS MY POINT?’
It doesn’t have to be a profound one. It doesn’t have to be unique one either, or even worth telling. But it has to be reasonably clearly defined by the writer, to guide him in the process of writing and help focus the narrative.
Even if the quality of the prose ends up inferior and full of holes, the story will at least have some resemblance of dramatic structure.
Sorry to say that, but I find none of that in “Silent Crash”. I simply don’t get it. None of it. But it might be just me.
My suggestion is:
Just try to focus less on writing the words on paper (or screen), and more on what they could potentially evoke inside your reader’s head.
Start with something that is not cool or cute. Something that makes you cry, for example. The results could surprise you. And you have the benefit of full anonymity here.
Best of luck, and keep writing.
Review of: Silent Crash
reviewed by dbialy on 10/21/2008
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