Review of: 75 Cents
reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 05/31/2011
Nugget of an idea
The story lacks cohesion and a true idea to take it through to the end. The nugget of the idea is the kindness between brothers, but it is quite convoluted to get there. The author is on the right track, but he needs more than just the kindness of brothers. A fleshed-out story would help and one that is longer. It is hard to convey love between brothers in such a short space. All the best though!
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