Review of: What if You Were the Frankenstein 

reviewed by Suesea on 09/11/2010
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Now there's an original concept. The idea that later in life you can find out you are a doctor's creation, similar to Frankenstein, is fascinating. It was funny too. You had some good lines in here.

The story started off slow. The first page didn't grab me and pull me in, but as I read I was hooked. The flow of the writing improved and once the idea is established, the story took off. The main character could use some fleshing out so that we can picture this Frankenstein character...if that's what
he/she...or it, really is.

The dialog needs identifiers in a few places, but it flowed well and made me giggle a couple of times. The structure is OK. The tension, suspense, could probably be heightened a bit, but I enjoyed it. There area a few sentences that read awkwardly. Initially, even the wording of the title struck me as odd. “What if you were the Frankenstein?” To me, it should read, “What if you were Frankenstein?” That may just be a matter of taste. All in all, this is a fun story and a quick read. Thanks for sharing it.


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