Passion, but a little rough
When reading this short story, I sense and feel the passion in which you are telling it. It happened. It's real. However, it's incredibly rough in its current form. Once again, I love the passion and dedication you have to telling this story specifically. Considering this is a memoir, the only changes you can make are more to your narrative voice. While I once again appreciate the passion, the biggest problem is simply in its telling and until that is changed, the story is in a rough form.
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A review of Night Owlsby Han Shot Second on 04/20/2013This was a very interesting, well written story. To be completely honest, I didn't quite enjoy this as much as I've enjoyed other stories on here, though I certainly like it quite a bit. Clearly, there's talent at work here, and I believe the best advice is the advice i've used over and over again: keep at it. By the end, I was satisfied and quit thrilled with the work. You... read -
A review of A Final Gift From Uncle Johnby Han Shot Second on 04/17/2013Truly, a very impressive piece of work. As a writer myself, it's always a pleasure to read a story that truly connects and this is obviously part of a much larger, probably even more impressive work. To be clear, I connected with the overall narrative voice and quite liked the chapter itself (even the ending). Overall, this is a really terrific piece of writing that anyone... read
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A review of The Gospel of Michaelby Han Shot Second on 03/22/2012So I loved this short story. Whenever I love something, I wax enthusiastically about how original it is, how utterly important it is to read, and of course, how much I really, truly loved it. And The Gospel of Michael -- by Ceska -- is one of those rare stories that manages to combine a science-fiction element with an emotional one. As any writer knows, that's incredibly hard... read
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