You know, a lot of people recommend against this kind of script, al a Magnolia, because of the problems inherent in it--i.e., creating a useable plot, characters with depth, and keeping the action going. I suppose this is good advice, since not many people can pull it off. I am happy to say, however, that Kent Murray can, and does, in his greatly entertaining script, According to Plan.
Your story is rich, your characters memorable, and your dialogue is snappy. It's all very good stuff, with a few exceptions that I'll go into in a minute. Our main character, Scott, does pretty well as the affable leading man drawn into a weird situation, and the othercharacters all come alive, particularly Jack and Dudley. I was happy for Charles and Kim's fortune, though a little unsure of what was actually going on there--why did she feel she had to play blackjack and risk the money they'd won? It seemed a bit out of character and the motivation just wasn't there for me.
The only problems that I could see with this script was with some of the scenes being just a little too talky, to the point where they dragged some. The Charles and Kim storyline suffered from this the most I think, especially at first, with Charles more or less repeating the same thing over and over again. The Jack and Dudley part was a bit verbose as well, but that didn't bother me because Dudley had interesting things to say.
The Mike and Sloane storyline didn't really seem to go anywhere, and that might be fine if it's sort of a breather from all the other stuff that's happening, but it could be funnier or more interesting, then. Just a thought.
The ending was clever--maybe a little TOO clever, actually, as I didn't get it on my first reading. In fact, I don't think I get it now, completely, but I think it could be cleared up. I keep thinking I'm missing a big "Ah-HA!" moment somewhere.
The mustard motif was interesting, but didn't really go anywhere. I would have liked to have seen it interact more, maybe Fred's car hitting a patch of mustard or the bottle, causing the crash. The mustard was the catalyst, but then didn't really do that much.
All in all: Great script! Good, concise, yet very organic writing, and a lot of fun characters.
Review of: According To Plan
reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 11/20/2005
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