This story started out great. It's a fun, entertaining read. The princess and the suitors is a timeless story and as I read it I could see it being read aloud to children before they went to bed.
Two things, why don't we get to know where Fred came from? What's the big secret? If there is one, you have to pay it off somehow. Also, the ending is off. I'm all for Grimm style stories, where the ending doesn't have to be positive, but this just seemed to...stop.
Review of: Fred of Wartsville
reviewed by krtshadow on 11/14/2008
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