Review of: THE SURVIVAL INSTINCT
reviewed by atlhalfjap on 10/04/2004
Pretty good war story
I enjoyed this a great deal. It was a very fast read, and I only have a few very minor quibbles with it. The first one is Eileen's name, it reminds me too much of Lousia May Alcott from Little women, its the first thing that jumped into my head. If this is not what you had intended, maybe you could lose the "May"? That would certainly take away the reference. On page 106, the sentence about Eileen's appearance doesn't make sense, "all present"? Huh? Also, there very a couple of clunky descriptions, such as "small town handsome" I'm having a hard time picturing that, as well as "decorated like the midwest." Like I said, those are VERY minor quibbles. All in all, I think this is a great SP.
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