I am not sure if this really counts for a short story. pardon its length and it is a decent read. the concept of time-travel and search of god was brought together beautifully. kudos. a brilliant concept. the narration was also very gripping except a few parts when the protagonist drifts into thoughts of Jesse.
a few things i observed. the story starts with a regret expressed by the protagonist of association with Dr. Towers. and throughout the story it was emphasized repeatedly. the ending however was extremely positive. thus a contradiction.
another observation . during this time reversal experience, he was able to notice minute details like the observation made by budding astronomers. with the speed of time reversal, i did not see as to how he was able to observe these minute details (page 37). or actually even make sense of things. probably the pace at which the reversal was happening could be expressed a bit more clearly.
Page 31 when the protagonist went back to the thoughts of Jesse, it became too distracting. it could probably be cut down a bit. run in the back of his mind. also it conflicted with the state of awe he had about the place.
Page 38: "her actions were bread from a desperate, galactic hunger" should it not be 'bred'?
all the best
Review of: Dr. Towers' Babel (rev)
reviewed by kumar.u.naresh on 04/04/2011
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