The first thing you notice is the lack of white space. This is an immediate flag of an amateur writer. Screenplays are not novels. They are meant to have short, punchy sentences that describe the characters/action with minimum effort. Just show us what we can see on the screen. Do not go into long descriptions or write your comments or anything that is an opinion, etc.
Watch for spelling mistakes, avoid CAPS in the dialogue and keep underlining to a minimum.
Would communist Russians play reels of “THE THREE STOOGES”... or appear on LIFE magazine?
Now to the story… a nice opening sequence leads us back into the Second World War… and then I’m hooked. This is like reading ENEMY AT THE GATES meets DEFIANCE with women and a tank.
Rare is it to come across such a gem on TS. Not only does this deserve to be a SOM, it could easily be made into a movie. The action is good, characters are great and the story/setting is superb.
Review of: IRON MAIDENS
reviewed by CJ Knight on 04/04/2010
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A review of Scabby CJ Knight on 03/23/2010Good to see a script from a fellow Brit on TS. This is a gritty drama based set against the backdrop of the miner’s strike. Perhaps too gritty? It’s so sad that it makes EASTENDERS look like Mary Poppins! There are brief moments of comedy, yet the overall theme and setting is utterly depressing. I think this might be a hard sell. People do not want to go and see films that... read
A review of The Boys are Backby CJ Knight on 03/21/2010As far as concept goes, this is a winner. You can definitely imagine a bunch of old pop has-beens staging a comeback... and you could probably find some star actors to play the roles if the script was right. Having said that, I didn’t think the story/characters quite hit the mark. The reason why THE FULL MONTY was so successful was because each of the characters had a back-story... read