Other Reviews by Cheyenne30 18

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  Trying to sale?
  A review of Foreword to The Gospels of Eibhlin
  by Cheyenne30 on 09/02/2012
  I started reading this and realized that it sound way too much like an advertisement for a book instead of something profound. I was expecting some illustrations of each book but instead found that I was being 'told' what was in it then 'seeing' what was in it. The concept is wonderful and I give you kudos for that but over all this story was simply boring to me. There was... I started reading this and realized that it sound way too much like an advertisement for a book instead of something profound. I was expecting some illustrations of each book but instead found that I was being 'told' what was in it then 'seeing' what was in it. The concept is wonderful and I give you kudos for that but over all this story was simply boring to me. There was also some miss spellings of words. Once this is rewritten I will be glad to re-read it. I simply don't want to feel like I am reading a person's Thesis in graduate school. read
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  Virginity?
  A review of The Purest Form of Virginity
  by Cheyenne30 on 04/24/2012
  This story is well written. I found a few mechanical and grammar errors in this writing. What is the conflict of this story? I feel that it surrounds the concept of needing a drug fix. Other than that I don’t see a central theme. I like how you describe the setting. The details are clear and concise. The beginning draws the reader in by describing how he interacts with the... This story is well written. I found a few mechanical and grammar errors in this writing. What is the conflict of this story? I feel that it surrounds the concept of needing a drug fix. Other than that I don’t see a central theme. I like how you describe the setting. The details are clear and concise. The beginning draws the reader in by describing how he interacts with the stranger at the door of the elevator. The ending seems to be hanging a bit. What happens to him after he gets home? Does the drug dealer come after him for any reason? The drug dealer and the main character have a strong individuality. I feel that the other characters are unimportant. I feel that none of the characters are special or important enough to get to know them at all. I to do not see how the title connects with the story at all. Try to find a title that is a bit more connected to the story itself. read
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  Missing Items
  A review of The Testament
  by Cheyenne30 on 04/23/2012
  Reading the story The Testament I could find myself remembering the times that I have struggled with my faith. I did not understand how it was so easy for her to turn herself over to a liar and a cheat like Satan when she had a strong relationship with Christ. I would have like to see more of a struggle with her faith before her decision to turn to Satan. What did Christ do... Reading the story The Testament I could find myself remembering the times that I have struggled with my faith. I did not understand how it was so easy for her to turn herself over to a liar and a cheat like Satan when she had a strong relationship with Christ. I would have like to see more of a struggle with her faith before her decision to turn to Satan. What did Christ do to help her throughout the first year? When did she start to waiver in her faith and belief? I feel there are some things missing in this story but I am not able to pin point them. I feel there should be some more scenes between Madrick and her. read