The Water Carrier was an interesting take on the shortage of water around the world. Though there were some details that were lacking (i.e. how did the main break?). There was great detail about how they came up with the idea to become water carriers. There werenít many details about what happens when they get different jobs. Explore that aspect of the story if you would like to make it longer. Over all I found myself thrilled with the story and rooting for the main characters.
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A review of Foreword to The Gospels of Eibhlinby Cheyenne30 on 09/02/2012I started reading this and realized that it sound way too much like an advertisement for a book instead of something profound. I was expecting some illustrations of each book but instead found that I was being 'told' what was in it then 'seeing' what was in it. The concept is wonderful and I give you kudos for that but over all this story was simply boring to me. There was... read
A review of The Purest Form of Virginityby Cheyenne30 on 04/24/2012This story is well written. I found a few mechanical and grammar errors in this writing. What is the conflict of this story? I feel that it surrounds the concept of needing a drug fix. Other than that I donít see a central theme. I like how you describe the setting. The details are clear and concise. The beginning draws the reader in by describing how he interacts with the... read
A review of The Testamentby Cheyenne30 on 04/23/2012Reading the story The Testament I could find myself remembering the times that I have struggled with my faith. I did not understand how it was so easy for her to turn herself over to a liar and a cheat like Satan when she had a strong relationship with Christ. I would have like to see more of a struggle with her faith before her decision to turn to Satan. What did Christ do... read