Review of: Sadie - First Draft 

reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 01/30/2012
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**DELETED ACCOUNT**
Sadie - First Draft - Review Credited Review
Hey Wordlover,

For a first draft, I was impressed with ďSadie.Ē There are some problems with it though. The dialogue is a bit silted and the ending was unrealistic for the gravity of the story. A woman felt wrong by life, in particular, abuse from a co-worker.

The formatting and concept is fine. Youíre missing a missing a cover page. And I would definitely not scan my documents in the future with the hand written words on them and post it on Trigger Street to be reviewed. No question, itís a mark of a novice. However, I do believe you have a good short story that at times made the hair on the back of my neck curl. All the best!

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