The story is about a seven year old boy remembering a strip mall being built in front of his house. It's an innocent look back at the impression all the new shops gave to him and his family.
Fleshing out the characters, especially the boy, and showing the story through his actions would help the reader care for the character and feel the loss of the simplicity of days gone by.
It may also help to add some conflict, not anything too dramatic, but something that enables us to root for the main character somehow. It's a nice tale and record of memories, but the story needs more information to add interest and make it more engaging.
Good luck with it.
Review of: Flamingo Plaza
reviewed by Suesea on 09/24/2010
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