This is essentially a PSA (public service announcement) aimed at teachers, parents, and students. If there was a story, it'd be whether or not this man decides to knife himself open. Did I like it? Yeah, it was pretty effective in its message.
The man's thoughts are given to us in third-person, perhaps meaning that Death is studying his actions. The man contemplates his future and we're emotionally gripped even though we don't know him at all.
So the text was very necessary and helpful.
Still- I'm not so sure what you think this film can do for you as a director, unless you want to make docs or more PSAs. Hollywood wants to see you tell a story, and not simply re-telling a story that's affected thousands of UK adults.
Sad yes, but remember- Hollywood is about making money!!
Still, very good job.
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