This story feels very real. The dialog sounds natural, the characters seem well fleshed out. It was entertaining and I appreciated the boy's character arc.
I don't have many notes because overall the script is very well written.
My main suggestion would be to start the custody conflict sooner and let it build bigger and get out of control. I loved that there was a brief moment of doubt, where it wasn't clear which parent was more guilty. It would be great if that doubt went back and forth throughout much of the script.
The ending was very satisfying - Susan seemed so pathetic and humbled at the end, desperately trying to use her son to get back together with her ex.
Review of: A Boy's Eyes
reviewed by Michael Keller on 10/22/2011
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