I wanted to watch this short because the synopsis seemed eerily similar to a script I'm working on.
Having said that, I think this is a neat little short. I liked all of the shots as it kept me intrigued as to what the mystery here was.
The acting was all good, and this is a very well made piece from a technical standpoint.
Now I think there might be one too many lines devoted to toying with us, especially concerning any "bomb" or whatever the woman thinks she's hearing. Looking back I don't understand why the second guy asks his partner to keep it down, so no one can hear. It's not like the girl they're throwing this for is around or anything.
And why did they leave the necklace on the table? That seemed a little random and forced- in other words he was just told him not to forget it so why would BOTH of them leave it there? Maybe I missed something!!
Overall, pretty good job. Nice story and nice execution.
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