This reminds me of a graphic novel even though there are no pictures. That speaks well of the writer's ability to create a setting, a mood, and an atmosphere. The are also some pretty impressive writing pyrotechnics that help define the main character: he's intelligent, literate, deadly and probably never wrong in his own mind.
Despite his/her writing strengths, however, the author is less successful in creating a clear narrative line. It's not completely clear whether the killer chooses his victims based on his predetermined knowledge of their past deeds or whether he discovers these deeds during the "confession" he solicits. In fact, it's not clear if the killer ever actually knows anything at all about his victims.
I had similar problems nailing down the transgressions of the Robert Carney character and whether he was the killer or the hapless victim.
I can understand the author's desire to tell his story metaphorically and obliquely to enhance mystery and drama. But the reader still should have more than an inking of what's going on. So high marks for word crafting and a " nice try" for storytelling.
Review of: Tell Me a Story
reviewed by LBarbarell on 04/25/2011
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