Time Flies is, basically, a modern version of The Tell-Tale Heart. Don't be fooled into thinking it's just a tired re-tread. This story is executed quite well, and leaves the reader with enough to think about after the first read is over.
Steve is deliciously amoral, a perfect foil for the disembodied conscience that comes to haunt him. The story DID follow the basic tenets of this type of formula, there really were few deviations form type, but it was told well and was pretty gripping.
For the end, I think it would have been a bit more surprising if your production notes hadn't alluded to it.
Review of: Time Flies
reviewed by krtshadow on 12/16/2008
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