Interesting piece. Kind of reminded me of Stephen King but I'm not sure why. The narator has this skiill of inflicting this weird state of claustrophobia to the reader while describing the main character's emotional purgatory, so major props for that.
You also do a really good job at creating a pretty complex character within the span of 20+ pages.
The concept wasn't very original and the dialogue seemed a bit dry- altough I did love that line ďItís not our fault! It canít be our fault!Ē. It's so simple. It came out of nowhere and it gave a whole new dimension to the "angry mob", indicating more than just anger and outrage aimed at the main character.
Review of: The Lament
reviewed by Envy on 08/29/2011
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