Review of: THE SURVIVAL INSTINCT
reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 10/13/2004
WAR IS HELL
Great story. One of the best reads I've had on TS. And with today's war this of course hits home very hard. The reality of this war story is what grabbed me, the wounds the soldiers receive that can't be seen. The writing style is lean and crisp but it still needs shortening. The hypnosis scene is a page that can go. We've al seen it a million times and need nothing more than him pulling out the watch and giving it one twirl. Best of luck in the battle zone called Hollywood.
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