Review of: Annotated Edition 

reviewed by pela-via on 04/29/2009
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pela-via
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What in the... This was the strangest story. I had a serious problem with a lack of context. I really didn't know what the hell I was reading (with the notes and alter-ego and the intense strangeness) ... I'm obviously missing something. Maybe there are inside jokes ... maybe I'm hopelessly dense... But the meaning and humor of this story was lost on me. That said, I don't doubt there are clever, interesting people in the world who would think this is fantastic.

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