Review of: Nice Boy 

reviewed by TMOwen on 02/14/2011
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TMOwen
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Great timing, great story, excellent dialogue. Why are you putting this perfect story here and not out somewhere like a book maybe? :)
I read the synopsis, but even that you cleverly worded so as not to give the story away.
You maintained a very good pace through the story, building the tension, feeding the reader little nuggets to foreshadow later events.
I really don't know what to tell you about this story in terms of a constructive review. You demonstrate all the qualities I admire in a writer -- great timing, great sense of irony, great grammar and word choices. I guess a suggestion would be to seek publication for this.
Excellent job. Very inspiring! Thanks for sharing this!

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