Review of: What Are Friends For? 

reviewed by mnjones on 08/11/2010
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The writing, in my opinion, is pretty good, except for one unnecessary adverb and some verbiage that could be trimmed. This is especially true of the ending, where around 180 words are used when about 50 would suffice nicely. Terseness would give greater impact to the surprise Sean has for his friend--and the reader.

But I enjoyed the read, hope for the opportunity to read more from this writer.

Page 3, "...nervously figeted..." I don't think "nervously" in needed. "Fidgeted" does a good job by itself.

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