Review of: The Doll (2nd Draft) 

reviewed by timhan on 11/14/2008
Credited Review
timhan
Where's the gore? Credited Review
This short story wasn't half bad. I think it has a lot of potential, but I did feel it was a bit too short.

I also think for a horror story it could have done with a bit more gore perhaps, what about hearing the screams of the mother, etc.?

I also felt that the daughter going back to bed wasn't really very realistic. I think I would have preferred the daughter to tell her mother about the doll and be dismissed, or even scolded for telling lies, and then the mother coming to a sticky end! Well just an idea. Thanks for uploading.

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