As for formatting you need to put the page number in the header so its easier to review.
All caps looks a bit silly to me, I think you could try another way of showing that it is a tense moment, like bellowed, screamed, yelled etc.
Some things I noticed:
You use far too many commas, your sentences run on.
I didn't really understand all that happened, felt a bit lost.
With some work I think this could be a good story though.
Review of: In a Field
reviewed by KSisk90 on 03/25/2012
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