Review of: Bathtime 

reviewed by Nekowrites on 11/25/2008
Credited Review
Nekowrites
Wonderfully creepy Credited Review
Bathtime was a wonderful little bit of creepiness. It reminded me of Hannibal Lector, before they went and "Explained" his proclivities. I would love to see the story fleshed out a bit (No Pun intended). Tell us more about what seems to be his OCD. Maybe even show her getting a hint of what is too come and getting a bit nervous. And one last point how did the police know he had her and not get there sooner? Was she a cop who had been hunting him without her team’s full knowledge, So many questions I would love for you to answer, thank you for sharing.

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