Learjet

A review of A Final Boundary

by Learjet on 12/01/2005

A tried and tested story, set in war torn Europe. Concept, is not new by any means, the presentation doesn't really help. Characters, appear very shallow, and shouldn't be, given the circumstances they're operating in. Dialogue, the French, and Spanish are not really required. Apart from that, it's fairly average. Story should move at a faster pace, the first ten pages are... read

Pomp and Circumstance.

A review of The Fisherman's Ring

by Learjet on 11/06/2005

This screenplay tells the story, of wheeling and dealing within the Catholic Church, and all points of the compass. Concept,is quite good, but the presentation muddies the waters between who's doing what,and why. Characters, range from fair to middleing, some could be cut, others need more development. Dialogue, is quite well written, but in places suffers from overstatement,... read

Irish Banshee's.

A review of Ardnaceanas

by Learjet on 10/22/2005

An interesting tale, only to be found in certain parts of the Emerald Isle. The concept is a good one, but allows itself to get bogged down with irrevelant points in the plot. Characters, portray the Irish flavour quite well, and believable. However a little more defining is called for. Dialogue, at times is good but wanders around on others. Story, moves along at a fairly... read

Richard's the Name.

A review of My Name Is Richard

by Learjet on 10/13/2005

The story of two brother's, each with skeleton's in the cupboard. The concept is a tried and tested one, just a different venue and doesn't quite pull it off. Characters, although interesting could be better. The "mother" needs a stronger influence than portrayed. Dialogue, reasonably written but needs trimming, harps on same subjects too often. Story tends to meander at times,... read

Queen Eleanor.

A review of Alienore

by Learjet on 10/03/2005

Historical centered screenplays are difficult at the best of times, this one fares better than most. Concept is good, concerns itself with the person rather than events, but lacks that certain bite to give it life. Characters come across fairly well, but seem shallow compared to their history. Dialogue seems trite in places, may be because of attempt to write medieval English... read

Raining, Cats and Dogs.

A review of Dogman

by Learjet on 06/30/2004

This screenplay tells a tragic tale, of latent retribution that festers, and eventually boils over. Concept is good, although gloomy there are bright spots. The overall execution is pretty good. Characters well crafted, and believeable which goes a long way to helping the story. Liked "Victor/Christopher" bounce. Dialogue also well written, and applicable to players. Story... read

Anvil Striker.

A review of SKULLCRUSHER

by Learjet on 06/26/2004

This screenplay as predicted is dark, and violent Be that as it may it contains a certain value. Concept is quite good, but with undertones of recent releases. The execution is reasonable enough for the story it tells. Character of "Skullcrusher" may need a little more development, in relation to "Ironfist" "Sara" seems to fit. Dialogue is well written, and flows fairly well... read

Jupiter's Way.

A review of Jupiter's Girl

by Learjet on 06/24/2004

This screenplay tells a story of heroism, and determination to beat the odds. Concept is always a popular one, and treads a well worn path. However the presentation is sound, and certainly retains interest. Characters are put together very well, liked "Jib/Joe" supporting cast are worthy of note. Liked the "cat" touch.Dialogue is well written, crisp and concise to suit players... read

Darker Shade of Pale.

A review of A Darker Shade of Gray

by Learjet on 05/06/2004

This screenplay relates to the experiences of a bereaved father, and his handling of the grief. Concept is basically good, although similar to several others, it does have a different ring about it. Characters are nicely drawn, liked "Hannah/Irving" not too sure you need the "Tarot" player "Gail". A little more interplay between "Gibson/Meaghan" would not be amiss. Dialogue... read

Plot, Fizzle's Out.

A review of The Plot

by Learjet on 05/05/2004

This screenplay recounts the story surrounding, what has come to be a yearly event in England. Guy Fawkes Night or Bonfire Night.Concept contains all the required ingredients "Desperate Men/Treason/Deception/Discovery" unfortunately the execution falls a long way short of the mark. Characters, all need development of varying degrees, cast needs trimming. Dialogue is a major... read

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