mari7789 

member since 01/15/2008 | last login 06/18/2009

I am a forty two year old mother of two..girl, twelve and boy, eighteen, married for the second time for ten years(got it right this time:)) I went back to college last year, although I am still not sure what I am...

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I am a forty two year old mother of two..girl, twelve and boy, eighteen, married for the second time for ten years(got it right this time:)) I went back to college last year, although I am still not sure what I am going to do with it...knowledge for knowledges sake I suppose. I have just started writing again after several years of abstinence. I am looking forward to diving back in and reading others work.

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Reviews by mari7789 15

  • A review of Heart Attack
    by mari7789 on 01/25/2008
    I have to say David that overall you did a very fine job on this. Very professional as far as I could see. A few minor suggestions, keeping in mind I am certainly not an expert as this isn't my field. In the begining frames it seems Leslie is too aware of the narrator, unlike her boyfriend. It might work better if she is also looking off, maybe doing something sweet such as... read
  • A review of Body Art
    by mari7789 on 01/24/2008
    Well written story of each persons subjective view of right and wrong. Rationalization can be an art form in itself. The characters were depicted well giving the reader a sense of their character without having to spell it out. However I think it might work a little better if a little more background is given about the narrator. The concept is good and I favor this type of... read
  • A review of Snapshot of Beauty
    by mari7789 on 01/23/2008
    This is a nicely written account of a feelings of love intermingled with questions of conforming to societies views. I was a little confused by the sentence "This woman beside her is not the imaginary friend, Sierra." Is Sierra the one telling the story and she is saying this to herself, or is Sierra the name of the imaginary friend? The imagery is effective in setting a tone... read
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Comments About mari7789 23

  • **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 01/31/2008

    Thanks for the review. Not sure about the penis vagina thing, Tentacles are a bit phallic however, my story is about mind control or an entity that cannot move and uses others to do it's dirty work for it. Like all the slyest monsters do I guess.
  • **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 01/31/2008

    I really appreciate the read you gave C&G. Glad you liked it, and glad it was somewhat easier to understand. Writing is all about communication, and that's why readers and reviewers are so great. They can say, 'Hey, you're not communicating this as good as you can,' and give us a second chance. Thanks again. Enjoy the day!
  • cmagnan on 01/29/2008

    Thank you for your comment on my High and Mighty review. I'd already chosen to ignore him - I've done the workshop thing a lot and I know that when someone is caustic about responses to their work, it's best to just let them live with themselves. Still, its nice to have some reassurance that I wasn't the only one.
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