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There is alot of things I did not like about the script. First off we have three characters names beginning with a C. CHARLES, CHRISTIAN, and CURTIS. Thats gets a little confusing to our audience after a while, I dont want to have to ask wait which one is which. So what was the whole story about??? Ok so a virus comes into play and of course people need food, but what is it...
There is alot of things I did not like about the script. First off we have three characters names beginning with a C. CHARLES, CHRISTIAN, and CURTIS. Thats gets a little confusing to our audience after a while, I dont want to have to ask wait which one is which. So what was the whole story about??? Ok so a virus comes into play and of course people need food, but what is it about??? It seems to me the whole story is about groups of people trying to get food. Not that interesting. Also the climax of the the whole thing happens at the VERY END of the script. Now im not bashing you or making fun of you, but the story was overall-BORING-. By the time I hit page 45 I was wondering to myself when it was oging to end? Also, considering this whole script has to do with a virus....what would curing the virus actually do for our survivors?? There still hungry, cold, and alone! Not to mention you didnt tell the audience how the virus spreads...airborne, ingesting, etc...so when people are driving around and handeling all these dead infected people, why aren't they getting the virus as well? If you want to make a story about people searching for survivors and food, interlace the three groups 1. WAREHOUSE 2. RED SLEEVES 3. HOTEL PEOPLE throughout the whole story and show how even though one group might have food, they have no medical appliances.......and one might have guns, but they have no food........and actually create and ending for the script. Yeah, there was no ending....nothing was solved.
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Funny concept. Def a Coneheads meets Osbourne type of thing. I like when you had Jack on the phone with the Emperor and played it off like it was a reality tv show. The way it was shot was very appropriate for the nature of the short. Dialogue was good even down to some of the accents. Good portrayel of Sharon Osbourne being obsessed with her pets, and I love how you incorporated...
Funny concept. Def a Coneheads meets Osbourne type of thing. I like when you had Jack on the phone with the Emperor and played it off like it was a reality tv show. The way it was shot was very appropriate for the nature of the short. Dialogue was good even down to some of the accents. Good portrayel of Sharon Osbourne being obsessed with her pets, and I love how you incorporated the Mormon. Good Job.
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Job well done. A story about a challenged disappearing individual and his friend or sisters struggle to keep a hold on him. Dialogue was well done, and so was the acting. There was some video problem that looked like you just didn't clean the tape or the tape deck, but it was a good short. The environment seemed real!
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Well I've seen alot better, and I've seen alot worse. Your dialogue reminds me of something I would put in my short. There def was some alternating buzz sounds when the shots would change. The quality of video is kind of rough, but I think you did a semi-decent job. The editing was the worst part, didn't really seem to flow and there was alot of jumpy cuts made..
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Ok well the idea was funny, but considering all you really had to work with was very little animation and sound, you oculd of definitley made the sound quality alot better. I did like it how you were having the characters say something, but we were able to read what they really thought. Again i thought the sound was terrible, and you probably could of done a better job if you...
Ok well the idea was funny, but considering all you really had to work with was very little animation and sound, you oculd of definitley made the sound quality alot better. I did like it how you were having the characters say something, but we were able to read what they really thought. Again i thought the sound was terrible, and you probably could of done a better job if you used real people and a real environment, it would of added a little txture to the background.
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I kind of liked the idea how you documented a false director, and should him acting as a director over Voice Overs.......to say it was funny is an overstatement, but to deny that it wasn't is an understatement. I like the black and white while interviewing the director, it makes the story feel like theres more emotion. And even though it was short, it was entertaining to...
I kind of liked the idea how you documented a false director, and should him acting as a director over Voice Overs.......to say it was funny is an overstatement, but to deny that it wasn't is an understatement. I like the black and white while interviewing the director, it makes the story feel like theres more emotion. And even though it was short, it was entertaining to watch. Good job.
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Hmmm......there was one part I didnt like and that was when he came to the road block sign, and he was further away from the sign and not moving, and in the very next shot he is past the sign moving. With what you put in the synopsis, you could of made this a hell of a lot funnier.The shots were composed well, however, I didnt like the way the audio sounded.
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We start off with a fight scene which to me was really contructed well. You had the gore and blood pouring out of every hole on the peoples body, and you actually made me laugh. The video and audio quality was a little poor, but the entertainment made up for them both. Hands up for the editor for really doing a great job on the project as well.
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Suprisingly the documentary wasnt that bad. Considering it was about dots, you somehow kept it intereseting. I like the controversey behind it and I could see how dots would upset some of the people. I think if you would of done the sequal, it probably wouldnt of been the same so it's a good thing you didnt do it. Nothing really else to say about it.
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Great shot composition. You had such abstract shots and they all went together beautifully. Although the story was weird as all hell, this is definitly one of the better short films that I have seen. You really know how to work the camera, and the movements were smooth and just right. Great editing as well. Kudoo's to the actor for playing such an eery, mysterious character...
Great shot composition. You had such abstract shots and they all went together beautifully. Although the story was weird as all hell, this is definitly one of the better short films that I have seen. You really know how to work the camera, and the movements were smooth and just right. Great editing as well. Kudoo's to the actor for playing such an eery, mysterious character. Good job Paul!
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