Michael Keller

A review of Intersection

by Michael Keller on 12/10/2012

This is a very interesting script. Here are my running notes: -Good attention grabbing opening scene. -Destiny having a doppelganger seems very dark and Jungian. Perhaps her "double" should have some starkly opposite, dark character traits. -Madeline is a very endearing character. I like how she waxes philosophical. -Am I misreading it, or is Destiny dating her shrink?... read

Self-Help Odyssey

A review of The Four Hour Workweek

by Michael Keller on 12/03/2012

The Four Hour Workweek is funny and heartwarming, with endearing characters. Overall, I enjoyed it, but my main concern is that there isn't much conflict, since we already know what will happen to Bobby, and he seems to achieve his smaller goals quite easily, so it reads like a sort of amusing travelogue. -It might be funny if Mr. Greenberg starts out normal and then suddenly... read

Be careful what you wish for...

A review of Penis Envy (NEW DRAFT)

by Michael Keller on 11/12/2012

This is a funny concept and a cleanly executed story. I don’t have so many notes, because the script seems to accomplish its intended purpose: -No need to editorialize in the first paragraph. Trust your audience. -Perhaps establish his impotence in the first scene with some kid of humiliation? -You do a good job of making Randall likable. -The pacing is good and the dialog... read

Action Figure Goldmine

A review of BATTLESAURS

by Michael Keller on 11/03/2012

This is a very marketable concept. Here are my running notes: -Exciting opener with the bronze hieroglyphs on the triceratops skull… I mean helmet. -You might want to cool it on the exclamations marks. -FYI: Raja is a Sanskrit word for King. The female version is Rani. Umar is an Arabic name. -Why not give these ancient kids some kind of stylized dialog? They speak like... read

Truthish

A review of A Very Convenient Truthiness

by Michael Keller on 10/30/2012

A Very Convenient Truthiness is a great concept for a script, with pretty decent story structure. I'd recommend working on the screenplay craft a bit so your concepts have the best delivery medium possible: -Opening scene has interesting exposition, but this isn’t a documentary. Whatever info you want to slip into the movie should come up in the storytelling. See “pope in... read

Cue Theramin

A review of Rednecks Vs Space-Zombies revised

by Michael Keller on 10/27/2012

This script is awesome. Here are my running notes: -Who made your cool poster? -Is this a star vehicle for Larry the cable guy? Ooh, I guess not - he dies. -The second voice over line is sort of redundant. I’d cut it and just keep the first. -Good dialog in the first scene -Excellent job describing the aliens. -Good job setting up the classic “don’t forget who you are”... read

Hand that Rocks the Basic, Fatal Instinct.

A review of Psycho Therapy (revised)

by Michael Keller on 10/23/2012

Psycho Therapy starts out like a weepy melodrama and ends up like a taught, psychological thriller. I really enjoyed the second half of the screenplay. You did an excellent job of elevating the stakes after the first act. My main suggestion would be to start the thriller aspects sooner. Here are my running notes: -The dialog in the opening scene is almost entirely exposition... read

All The Court's a Stage...

A review of Pride Of Lyons (2012)

by Michael Keller on 10/19/2012

Hi David. I'm always happy to get your scripts assigned, since I can expect a great deal of skill and professionalism. This one is no exception. Pride of Lyons is a fun, redemptive story with a likable protagonist and amusing scenes. Here are my running notes: -Good job generating sympathy for Danny early on. -Doesn’t teach A-listers? I didn’t think A-listers take lessons... read

Land Ho!

A review of The Illusion of Safe

by Michael Keller on 10/01/2012

As usual, Steph delivers a competently written, fun, uplifting story. Here are my running notes: -Excellent style and phrasing on the first page remind me I’m in the hands of a professional. What’s a piquant pose? -A lot of the themes of the movie are explained early on in dialog. But there are always more cinematic ways to show, rather than tell. -Isn't the coast guard... read

Hypocritical Oath

A review of Student Loan

by Michael Keller on 09/26/2012

Student Loan is a fast paced crime action/comedy, with implausible, but fun sequences. I think the action scenes are generally serviceable, but perhaps some work can be put into character development. It is unclear to me why David really wants to be a doctor and how he can reconcile this desire with his current line of work. I also don’t see how his background would enable... read

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